Shawn Mitchell

The poem itself is very dramatic. The structure affects the atmosphere though. Nonetheless, briliantly written. The second stanza was my favorite.

You're only 15? Wow, very impressive. You have a mature yet very straightforward style. Very nice. I really liked the concept too. These days, it's hard to find an original ...

Yeah, unfortunately, that's my voice. Well, I sound a little different now... That song is kinda old...

Something I think a lot of people can relate to in some way or another. Very powerful statements and questions. Good thought provoker. Well done.

I think what was most effective was how you used your metaphors and personified everything. Your word choice was average, but the way you worded the words was spectacular. Lots ...

Very interesting lyrics. Very poetic. I get a alternative vibe from it, which is my favorite type of music. I really liked the chorus. You exposed the flaws of humanity ...

I agree, it was very amusing. Did you keystyle it off the top of your head? It was a nice flow of things and good line length. Well done.